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Title: Arrival
Author: Vierna-Drottingu
Game: Mass Effect 2
characters/pairing: fem!Shep/Miranda
Disclaimer: dont own anything, Bioware does





Admiral Hackett just finished debriefing me, when I heard the doors open behind me. My first reflex was to take out my gun from holster, as I knew nobody ever entered my cabin without ringing first. I resisted that urge, as I didn't want to appear on edge, seeing as how there would be alarms all over ship if there were indeed intruders onboard.

As I turned around, I saw Miranda with a determined look on her face, coming towards me.

"What....?" I tried to ask her what was she doing here, when she cut me off.

"I will not let you go alone on a mission in battarian space." She said, stopping right in front of me, her arms crossed bellow her breasts.

I frowned at her "How do you...? You know what? Never mind, I don't think I want to know." I turned my back to her and went to get my armor. "But I have a mission I need to prepare for, so if you would mind?"

I glanced at her, and I saw that she was still watching me, arms folded, and no-nonsense look on her face. Finally, after a few moments, she spoke "I'm coming with you."

I turned sharply to face her "What?! No way! You have obviously heard Admiral when he said this needed to be done QUIETLY. I cant take anyone with me, because the battarians will kill their hostage if they even suspect that we are coming!"

She smirked at me, the look in her eyes telling me I'm in trouble, as she closed in on me "Are you saying that I cannot be as stealthy  as you can?" I started backing down, trying to keep some distance between us, as she continued her advance, her eyes never leaving mine.

"Or are you saying that I am not perfect enough for you? To be on your top-secret, elite team?" As my back hit the wall, she put a hand on my chest, pinning me there. She leaned in, to whisper in my ear "Or maybe you don't trust me? After everything we've been trough?"

Images from the engine room flooded my mind, as my heart started beating faster. I had to resist the urge to throw her on my bed and ravage her body in lust.

"I, uh..." Focus Shepard, damn it! Cant think. Damn this woman. She really knows how to press my buttons.

I closed my eyes and took a deep breath. I felt her lean back a little. She brought her knee to my thigh, caressing it up and down.

Shit. I shivered before I finally opened my eyes.

She was looking at me, a triumphant smile on her face, like she already knew my answer. "All right, you can come." I let out throatily.

She moved away from me, clasping her hands "Excellent! See you in shuttle in ten minutes!" With that she turned around and, swaying her hips deliberately, exited my room.

I let out a sigh, as I slumped down to the floor, my head between my hands.
:iconvierna-drottingu:
Its kind of a sequel for my Music fic [link] though you dont really need to read it, before reading this.

Chapter 2 [link]
Chapter 3 [link]


It concentrates on Arrival DLC... I wasnt really satisfied I couldnt bring anyone with me, so this is my way of fixing it ^^

It will have two chapters, 3 at most....

Fem!Shep/Miri
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:iconactivescan:
Ha! Shepard's dirty little mind ^_^
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*Vierna-Drottingu Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awww yeah, especially when a certain Cerberus Operative is in question xD
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:iconactivescan:
Well who can blame her? ;)
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*Vierna-Drottingu Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I certainly don't :D
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:iconheartoicev3:
very nice articulately written should've been a duo mission any way.
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*Vierna-Drottingu Jul 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :hug: I agree, the one big flaw of this mission was that it was solo....
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:iconinversereality-2:
A fun short about a power fight between two powerful women. I think you do a great job of getting the reader to cheer for Miranda’s side as she coerces Shepard into sharing her point of view. I think the story also establishes a Shepard much less in control of her sexual self than Miranda, which is an interesting power disparity to play off of.

That said, it was a little unclear whether Shepard was generally in control of much around her at all. All of her actions in this story are reactive, so in some ways, she seems like nothing but a pawn in her own life. Without a longer story setup, it’s hard to tell, of course, but maybe there could have been small ways to contrast her control of herself versus her lack of control when Miranda’s involved, which would heighten the tension and relationship between the two.

One interesting way in which this played out is in the sentence structure between he first half of the story and the second. In the first two paragraphs, most of the sentences are both front and back weighted, meaning they contains descriptions that modified the clause in the middle of the sentence. It conveyed ambivalence and seemed, to me, “weaker” sentences in terms of their ability to convey action and direction. Towards the end of the story, however, we get a lot of strong subject verb combos heading the sentences, which are much clearer and easier to understand. This was really interesting since it occurs structurally *after* Miranda has taken control – not just narratively, but grammatically, too!
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Mood: Joy *Vierna-Drottingu Jun 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
wow thank you for this, I really need more critiques :hug: :D

well, first things first, just want to point out that Shep is MOSTLY based on my personality (thats why I'm writing ME fics in first person)... so thats why she isn't really in control of her sexual self, as you put it (neither am I :XD: ) :) and thats why she mostly just reacts to the events (like I do).
Of course, in battle, she is much more in control (that's one of our biggest differences :XD: ), otherwise, she wouldn't really be Spectre material, right? :)

second; honestly, I'm really new to this writing stuff, and I still need a lot to learn... right now, I'm just writing words as they come to me, and seeing that English isn't my first language, there are bound to be mistakes and weak sentences... I just hope I will be able to fix that in the future, which is why I love a good critique, like this one :D
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:iconnoang3l:
Waaaaaaa I finally got to reading your fics :woohoo:

Been quite busy here in Austria, working my ass off.

Anyways, love how you twisted Arrival, I didn't like being alone on the mission either :no:
Glad to hear there'll be at least one more chapter :aww:
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*Vierna-Drottingu May 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
hahaha that first emoticon rocks! :XD:

anyway, the next chapter will probably be up sometime today, as Ive been working for a long time on it (It was supposed to be a one shot, but I figured it would be better if this was separate chapter, and whats going on on the asteroid will be much longer) :)
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